749 Ambition


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22nd Sep 2017, 12:00 AM

Right after last update I worked the script and thought this works well.

The story is very MC perspective driven, so Saturno's thoughts right away are "this is BS. I know what you are really getting at." Hope with Saturno's thoughts interrupting her reveal still works.

I was working with the original script and thought it kinda sounded too much like what every comic does. The reveal and the character's shocked reaction.

Saturno feels that he already anticipated she is trying to convince him to return fully to their plan. Maybe he isn't fully processing what she is actually saying. His plan is shut down.

Is it true about the world? Heehee. ;)

It is a lot of what we know anyway. Anyone that tries to eat the world gets consumed by the world. Just like the god Saturno eats his own children to prevent them from taking over.

But this isn't the big reveal of this chapter...

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24th Sep 2017, 3:00 AM

Clearing things up a bit:

Spawn suckers:
Saturno: "I couldn't begin to imagine how long these giants must have been feeding upon the smallest entities to become that large."


Saturno: "They were probably centuries old."
Probably. Saturno's being an unreliable narrator. He doesn't really know.

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22nd Sep 2017, 4:06 AM

Well alright then. Not sure why it does the eat everything thing, but that's just more questions for the Science. Not that it changes anything really, because one way or another, as a way to stop it from fighting back effectivly, as a way to buld up enough strength, he would need to use the human world to eat it anyway. Really it seem like for now the path ahead is clear.

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22nd Sep 2017, 4:49 AM

Well, I guess that explains that mystery.
Alpha and Saturno's dynamic is super interesting!

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22nd Sep 2017, 4:55 AM

Didn't we already see some huge beings that lived on the tiny forms escaping from the tiny mushroom-like growths, which Saturno thought would have taken an immense amount of time to grow on such minute food? Or is "a couple of decades" an immense amount of time to fast growing/fast learning/fast changing deamons?

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24th Sep 2017, 11:56 PM

Well, he did only think that they were old because they were large while not eating large things, and he did think that while benig rather small, so there might be something screwy going on.

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23rd Sep 2017, 5:39 AM

Wait. If it eats everything every twenty years or so, how could some of those demons grow so big? Saturno said it took centuries for some of them o grow because they only ate the tiny fragment demons that or something

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25th Sep 2017, 6:06 AM

I don't know if I buy it either Saturno haha. If the world ate everyone every so often how would Alpha know?? The world creature doesn't seem like the kind to talk to others. Unless Alpha hid out in the human world or otherwise somehow escaped being consumed the last time it happened.

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